Sunday, June 19, 2011

Could you critique the lyrics I have written? Thanks.?

(blatantly unfinished, I only have the first verse and possibly the
second - any opinions/advice/ideas please!)

I said God bless the believers,
Shed a tear for the decievers,
Watched the memories of our future,
Fall like stars into the sky,

Maybe one day I'll return with,
Everything that we believed in,
until then farewell let me give you,
a kiss to say goodbye - not sure about the bit in brackets.

If you think it's awful please be honest, although constructive
criticism would be appreciated =) xx

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